tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2483012345121369289.post5740354842831645779..comments2023-10-07T11:09:45.804-04:00Comments on My Idea of Fun Blog: Untitled #16My Idea of Funhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06887383382323769256noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2483012345121369289.post-28190722649361619122008-11-16T23:14:00.000-05:002008-11-16T23:14:00.000-05:00c.w., love your shit. you know this. now that i've...c.w., love your shit. you know this. now that i've been reading your posts for a while now, i would like to offer a suggestion: try playing with your line breaks. i think you use very lovely language, and maintain an almost narrative quality to your "poems." don't feel limited to space and structure is all i'm saying. i think if you thought more about where to cut your lines, your pieces would be even better. maybe you all have it planned out this way for a reason. if that's the case, keep truckin!My Idea of Funhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06887383382323769256noreply@blogger.com